Thoughts about Comments

I have just reviewed my comments from my storytelling and introduction posts. So far my comments have been great and I have a lot of positive feedback. I think that it is a good and bad thing. Of course I like hearing positive things about my stories but I do want to hear negative things about them. I would like to hear things I could of done better to please the reader or make the story more interesting for them. That is one of the down falls for my comments I have gotten, I just have not seen any criticism yet. I think people are too nice on their comments and it would make them more memorable if they helped me improve on my writings.

My comments so far are good in my opinion. I like to get to the point and not get to detailed about them. Which for me is positive because it does not make the writers read into the comments to much. One of the things I could improve on is giving more feedback on things I think the writers need to improve on but so far, I have read very good stories by everyone.

Storytelling for Week 5: Kunti and her Son

The setting of the story starts of in one of the most protected prison in the palace. Prince Vidura and his family have just been put in the prison for robbing Prince Duryodhana. They have been sent to prison for life for robbing one of the most important princes. In prison Prince Vidura has been devising a plan to escape with his family. To make sure he knows every step of the plan he has put secret images over his body. The guards of the prison have no idea what the images stand for but the plot is genius. The plan involves a skillful miner that they have found to dig a passageway from under the jail to the forest outside the palace. The tunnel took a couple days to make but time was running out because Prince Duryodhana has decided to send the family to hang. Vidura plan did not know this was going to happen but he finds a way to send a message to the miner to speed up the digging process. Once the miner saw the message he spent long nights digging the passageway before the family was set to hang. The day has come for the family to hang and when the guards begin to open the ceil door they are shocked. The guards say, “Where have they gone, what is this hole”. The family is long gone and has already made the escape to the forest. This is not the end of the Vidura’s plan. Before they escaped they set a trap for the guards when they close the ceil door and it will create a huge fire. The guards began to close the door and that’s when the fire explodes in their face and the prison begins to light up in flames. The flames are so powerful that it begins to set the palace on fire and it burns down the palace and Prince Duryodhana. The family has been in the forest waiting for their plan to succeed and when they see the fire burn down the palace they know everything has worked. The final part of the plan was to go back in the palace and go back to their normal lives without the evil prince leading the palace. Prince Vidura is happy to live his life in peace and without the fear that he and his family will be put back in prison.

Authors Note: The Story is mainly about a cruel plot by prince Duryodhana. Vidura and his brother Yudhishthira thought the plot was to burn his their family alive. Yudhishthira warned his family that the prince might try this awful act. Vidura sent a skillful miner to try and dig a hole under the house for their family’s safety. The miner was very sneaky with building the tunnel. Then a character named Purochana, the wicked captain, is the one in the plot that is suppose to burn the palace down. The very night the miner ended the work they entered the passageway and descended into it. Queen Kunti walked until they reached the mouth of the tunnel. A new character is presented called Prince Bhima. He was important because he set fire to the guardhouse where the wired captain lived. The captain was destroyed in the fire and then the fire was so big that it began to burn the lac palace. The Pandavas were all burned alive because of the drunken night and were all unconscious. The people of Varanavata awoke and went outside and saw the palace destroyed and nothing was left but ashes.

Bibliography: House of Fire, Mahabharata, C.A. Kincaid, 1921, Story Link

Vidura, Picture Link

Week 5 Reading Diary: House of Fire

For my second half of the reading for Wednesday, I decided to read about the House of Fire. This story is very interesting because of each characters role. The main character to me in this story is the prince Vidura. The story is about how Vidura came to find out about a cruel plot. The cruel plot was by Prince Duryodhana. The reason I have liked this reading and the one before is because of how many characters are involved. The good part of this story is how Vidura acts about the plot. It is interesting how he goes about the news of the plot and tells his family first. I like how the author starts to involve other characters. It makes me think about what I should be doing in my storytelling’s. He describes each character and how they are involved. I think each of my reading’s give me a better idea on how to introduce my characters and describe why they are apart of the story. Each story I have read goes into extreme detail about the plot and also goes into detail about the characters. I believe for me to be a better storyteller, I should be going into more detail about my plot and characters. What I notice about the details is that it makes for a better story and the readers also feel like they know what the author is talking about. I love seeing the story in my head and that’s what I need to be doing for my readers when I write my stories. I should be creating a vision for each reader.

Kunti

Link:House of Fire by Donald A. Mackenzie.

Week 5 Reading Diary: Kunti and Her Son

I read the story about Kunti and her son, which is one of the stories in part A of the reading. The story was pretty short but it was filled with interesting details. It gave me a lot of new insight of how the author perceived these characters in his own way. I learned more about multiple characters such as Kunti, Vasudeva, Krishna, Vindhya and Surya. There were many more that were talked about but these were some of the important characters that I got out of the story. One of my favorites was Surya, the god of the sun. He was very interesting because he was a main character and Kunti one day had a dream about him. One of my favorites parts is when she had a vision about him and he drew nigh in the attire of the rajah wearing celestial earrings. To keep in short she basically had a vision of being a mother of his son named Karna. To conceal her newborn “babe” she placed soft sheets around him. This is one of my favorite parts because it introduces the main part of the story and it was very catchy to me. I like how the author gave detail about what was going on. I love seeing pictures in my head about the readings and if it does not create a picture in my head it really does not provide me with any motivation to keep reading. In this case, I could picture what was going on so therefore I kept reading and found this story to be very cool and interesting.

Surya

Link: Kunti and Her Son by Donald A. Mackenzie